Nowadays, most people had attended to college in their learning life. Maybe, everyone attend to college for many different kinds of reasons, I think people almost have three reasons in the same. They want to learn more knowledge they have ever known, to get a diploma from colleges, and to get a good job after they graduate from college. We know learning is equal to everyone, despite you are old or young you can learn. Many people like to attend to college to learn more knowledge and find their interest then cultivate it. College is the place for you to prepare your skills before you enter society. There are much information and source in college, if you use it properly and you’ll have many gains after you graduating from colleges.
Of course, some people attend to college have the same reason to get a college diploma. They attend to the college to learn for four years, and then they’ll get a diploma to confirm they graduate from colleges. Because of the diploma is connected to their career and is an important confirm for them. They struggle to get the diploma, and spend much spirit and totally four years in colleges.
I think the most important reason to attend to college is that they want to get a good job in the future. They spend four years to learn some knowledge and cultivate their skills to face the problems in the complex society. If they concentrate on their business in colleges, they’ll get many gains and will be easy to get a good job in the future. No pain, no gain. If you want your future to comfort, you have to pay more right now.
Connect to the three reasons, I think they just want their life after gradate from college to be better and comfortable. People want to learn more knowledge not only because they like to learn new knowledge, but also because they want to get a diploma. To get a diploma just because they want to get a good job in the future. To get a good job just because they want their life and family live at high quality life.

Hello Eunice!
回覆刪除I'm Josh. Your eassy is good. You do a good job. However, you topic sentence is too specific in forth paragraph. It is lack of development. The most important thing is there is no conclusion in this eassy. I think you need to give it a conclusion.
Sincerly,
Josh
Hi Eunice,this is Joan
回覆刪除I think your artical is good. You explain all the reasons for us, but maybe you can add some of your thoughts in it, that will be perfect.
Hi, I'm Fred but I'm not afraid.
回覆刪除I consider that your article make me read smoothly, and easily to read.
But I think you can make some subjective vivid sentence about the article, and then make me feel how you want to show me the essay.